5、Original: The advertisement as the news inform us the current technologies of a country.
Revised: The ad informed us of the current technology, solar, available within that country.
1、 Original: ...there is no deny that a university or college really offers us great enlightment for students future development and growth.
Revised: ... there is no denying that a university diploma really offers great opportunities for student's personal growth.
there is no deny改成牢固搭配there is no denying“不成否认”。出格要留意牢固搭配中所利用的词性、词形等。
2、Original: Modern technologies have improved today's factories technology and brought pollutions to the minimum.
Revised: However, with the modern technology, air and noise pollution can be kept to a minimum.
“降到最低水平”是to a minimum。固然，spend可以表示“消花钱或时候”。
6、Original: I do admire those people who trust their first intuition for their courage to follow what their hearts believe.
Revised: I do admire those people who trust their first impressions, for they have the courage to follow their hearts.
“随着感应走”的英语表达式follow one's heart。
4、 Original: Every year, Lenovo spends a large amount of money to product environment without regret. By doing this, Lenovo makes a profit at the same time.
Revised: Every year Lenovo spends a large amount of money on environmental protection while at the same time makes a profit.
原句中动词spend的词组搭配不正确，要用inform sb. of sth.,不能间接说inform sb. sth.。别的，表白他们的用处范围。常用的搭配有：spend money on sth./sb.表示“在某人或某事上花钱”;spend time with sb.表示“花时候和某人在一路”;spend time(in)doing sth. 表示“花时候做某事”等。
3、Original: If you want to catch the pace of the rhythms of the modern world you had better get ready.
Revised: If you want to keep pace with the rhythms of the modern world, you had better get up early.
原句catch up with the pace的搭配是差池的，假如表述“和现在天下的快节奏同步”可以用keep pace with(与…同步)或catch up with(遇上…步伐)。原句中还存在表达不妥的题目，改后稿用while结构省略了一个句子，原句有些烦琐，留意摘录一些牢固搭配，记忆一定要正确，并在SAT写作练习中留心牢固搭配